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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Aug 17, 2005 11:23:05 GMT
Please comment on my Fan Fiction. All suggestions on how to improve are greatly appreciated.
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 17, 2005 11:30:34 GMT
Nicely written.
As most people tell me when i write fics you should describe the place where the hcarcters are, for example,
Prue sat on her bed in the manor as the wind blew the trees outside.
People tell me this all the time and i am NOT critising your writing because it is excellent i just though it might help with your next part.
please update soon and well done it is a great start.
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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Aug 17, 2005 11:38:32 GMT
Thank you Viki, and thanks for the advice. I will try to do that in the rest of my story.  +Karma+ April x x |
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 17, 2005 12:45:12 GMT
i love the second part out of curiosity are you writing this as a script because there is a lot of speech.
i do LOVE it well done
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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Aug 17, 2005 12:50:01 GMT
I wasn't meant to be, does it look like a script?
And thanks for the comment.
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 17, 2005 12:53:05 GMT
in away it does as it is kinda like
piper said
phoebe smiled
Prue sighed
if you no what i mean.
i do like it and there is alot of interaction between the sisters,
again i dont want to sound harsh just wanting to help
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