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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 8, 2005 22:19:46 GMT
Please tell me what you think, i am sure there is a load of mistakes, also any advice on improvement would be greatly appreciated
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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Aug 11, 2005 21:12:18 GMT
This is a good story line to do, I hope you post more soon.
Hope Shannen and Julian find Amy soon!!!!
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 11, 2005 22:46:33 GMT
Who said she'd been napped wait and see lol  |
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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Aug 17, 2005 12:43:05 GMT
I think that is really good so far, I don't think you need any advice, just slip in a few commas and your there!
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Aug 17, 2005 12:46:32 GMT
thanks April, im not very good with grammer
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Post by *~_CharmedForeva_~* on Sept 19, 2005 17:41:30 GMT
;D Great update, it may be short but its good, lol.
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Post by ~*lyssiesgirl*~ on Sept 19, 2005 17:44:39 GMT
thanks hunny  oh by the way just wondering if the grammer is any better in this section. Also do you think it sounds silly her waking up and it being a dream or do you think its ok with the new direction i took it in? |
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